tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1050645680221973601.post7353894150678123595..comments2023-05-23T08:24:07.623-07:00Comments on The Ink Loft: White Bird–Leanne’s Flash FictionRachelle O'Neilhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02884513979937452569noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1050645680221973601.post-57547018645435980172015-04-11T05:31:17.803-07:002015-04-11T05:31:17.803-07:00Sorry it took me so long to give you feedback; I j...Sorry it took me so long to give you feedback; I just realized I had to. I love this story, Leanne. I particularly like how well you describe things, especially in the phrase "with hair the colour of the edge of a sunset." I also love how you made this story kind of vague so that the reader could come to his/her own conclusions. The only thing I had trouble with was keeping up with what character was responsible with doing what-as Rachelle said. Otherwise, you did an amazing job!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1050645680221973601.post-7973730718065500452015-03-31T18:49:17.145-07:002015-03-31T18:49:17.145-07:00That's how my story was as well. I actually l...That's how my story was as well. I actually like that effect. As long as there's enough there to let me know the general idea of what's going on, a story like this with minimal explanation is fascinating to me. I like to start a book that way, and then explain more about the situation as the book goes on.Emmarayn Reddinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15906735934810971194noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1050645680221973601.post-70546739389082501252015-03-30T20:22:34.926-07:002015-03-30T20:22:34.926-07:00*grins* Sometimes that happens. :) *grins* Sometimes that happens. :) Rachelle O'Neilhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14414561666549371254noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1050645680221973601.post-16954326416905777532015-03-30T20:15:40.738-07:002015-03-30T20:15:40.738-07:00I don't have an explanation yet, so I want to ...I don't have an explanation yet, so I want to know too :) This whole thing was rather confusing but it was fun. Thank you!Leannehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01044373635100656803noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1050645680221973601.post-125779308507501772015-03-30T20:09:55.845-07:002015-03-30T20:09:55.845-07:00Thank you! :)Thank you! :)Leannehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01044373635100656803noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1050645680221973601.post-23784851142161773042015-03-28T12:55:41.012-07:002015-03-28T12:55:41.012-07:00What an action-packed story! I really enjoyed the ...What an action-packed story! I really enjoyed the premise and the fantasy-feel.<br /><br />At the beginning, you said, "I <i>stop</i> midstride and <i>stop</i> singing." The use of "stop" twice in such a short sentence was really jarring for me. Also, when she and the boy fly into the sky, she later says it was the girl who launched them up. I got the impression it was the boy's power, so I was rather confused there.<br /><br />I'm still trying to wrap my head around the concept of the Impossible and Nothing. It's got me really intrigued. The lack of explanation annoyed me a bit, but I was still very entertained. :)Rachelle O'Neilhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14414561666549371254noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1050645680221973601.post-38631127442295817662015-03-27T15:20:17.118-07:002015-03-27T15:20:17.118-07:00Nice! Very exciting! This sounds like the beginn...Nice! Very exciting! This sounds like the beginning of a great fantasy adventure... definitely a book I'd want to read. Great work! Emmarayn Reddinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15906735934810971194noreply@blogger.com